My last night’s dream: To hell with the past

So last night, I had a dream that I just had to turn into a short story. Enjoy and let me know if you guys liked it. 


As, I was visiting at an excluded lunch bench, far away from the café; I looked upon a very interesting scene. Three people just dropped to the ground from the air. One of them looked vaguely familiar.

“I’m going to kill you, Tom!” the woman yelled at one of her comrades.

“No, you’re not,” Tom replied, “you’re going to thank me because now you know that your machine works.”

“So, guys?” the second guy asked. “Where exactly are we?”

“By my watch, we went back in time of twenty years,” the woman replied.

“Nice one, Amber,” Tom whistled. “See that, Zack? We get to see a glimpse of the small past.

I quickly finished my salad and was working on my drink because I figured that one of them was bound to find me staring at them. Seconds after the last of the soda went down the pipes, Tom noticed me and pointed quite rudely at me.

Amber turned around and eyed me with fear.

I took my bag, motioned her to follow and walked away.

Ten minutes later, I swiped my key card at the door to the lab and leaned against a table.

Amber walked in first. Zack and Tom followed in.

“How do you have access to my lab?” Amber asked.

“Guess, I didn’t make much of an impression while working for you,” I replied bitterly. “My name is Crystal and if I remember correctly, I’m your third assistant. Tell me what got me fired.”

Amber looked like she’d seen a ghost.

“Right,” she replied. “I apologize. It just so sudden that we ended up here.”

I eyed my watch. “Listen, your ‘past’ self will be here in an hour. You have an hour to figure out how to finish a copy of your machine and go back where you came from.”

I took my purse and started walking towards the door, only to be stopped by Zack’s hand on my shoulder. I felt an electric current move through me from his touch.

“Why are you helping us?” He asked.

“Because having people from the future here is not a good thing. Though, you’re right. I shouldn’t care considering that now I know that Amber will fire me.” I turned around and glared at my ‘future’ ex-boss. “So why did you fire me?”

“You left paperwork on my desk in plain view. If someone had an access to it, my project could have never gotten realized,” Amber replied.

“That doesn’t sound like me,” I replied. “Remember, now you have less than hour.”

“We’ll need to hide somewhere for the night,” Tom said from his place by the bookcase.

“We need money for a hotel,” Amber said looking at her old desk.

“If you take money, I’ll get fired sooner,” I growled and pulled out sixty dollars. “There’s a cheap hotel around the corner.”

“Thank you,” Zack said and smiled.

I smiled back and left. The hard metal door closed behind me and I leaned against it. Knowing my future did not help my mood because I couldn’t even search for a new job, not knowing when Amber would sack me precisely. I put in my earpiece and decided to listen in to the conversation inside.

“When we get back to our time, you will need to find Crystal and hire her back,” Tom said.

“I can’t,” Amber replied.

“Why?” Zack asked.

“I didn’t fire her,” Amber replied.

“What?” the two men asked in unison.

“I killed her,” Amber said.

My heart sped up and I gripped my shirt from shock.

“I was working hard on one of the components. The portal was open and I kept looking back-and-forth between the portal and my computer. Crystal came up with coffee for me and I, without much thought, hit the coffee from her hand from anger for the interruption. Crystal’s foot got caught on one of the wires and she slipped. I turned off the portal too late. Her body was cut in half. Half disappeared through the portal and half was bleeding on the ground. I turned on the portal again and pushed her body in. Soon after, I reported her missing and no one has ever found her.”

“Shit,” Zack cursed.

I ran as fast as I could out of there.


An hour later, I was drinking hot chocolate and looking at my three visitors. Amber looked embarrassed, which was new. The men looked like they wanted to be anywhere but at my apartment.

“Did I not give enough money for a hotel?” I asked.

“You’ve given plenty, but I need someplace quite to work and it may take more than one day,” Amber explained.

I wanted to slam the door in their faces. I wanted to forget what I’ve overheard and just forget that anything had happened, but knowing that I would die soon, did nothing to my mood.

“You get twenty-four hours,” I growled and allowed them inside. “There’s food in the fridge and I’ll make coffee for you guys.”

“Thank you,” Amber accepted.

I looked down at my nightdress and was thankful that I remembered to wear my matching robe. Then, I walked into the kitchen and started working on the coffee.

“Tom and I will be back. I’ll use the money you gave me to buy a couple of tools.” Amber followed me in.

“Fine,” I replied without turning around. Seconds later the door closed once again and I heard Zack walk up to me.

“I’ll ask again,” he started, “why are you helping us? Especially since knowing that my friend fired you for something so small.”

I looked at him and noted his features. He was an attractive man around my age. If I would have lived, I would be much older than him. It hurt me to know that now there was no point in asking Brian out from my classes. There will be no relationships for me; there will be no PhD for me. There will be no future for me.

“To tell you the truth,” I started, “I overheard you guys speaking after I closed the door and I know that my life is coming to a stop.”

“How?” He asked shocked.

“Amber always gives earpieces to her assistants. That’s how we know when it’s safe to come in. From her ramblings, we would know on which equations to work on outside of the door and when she would notice the time, she would open the door and see what we worked on. Guess, she stopped doing that after my death or else she would have asked me to leave my earpiece at work.”

“Wow,” he replied. “I’m so sorry. I wish that we could do something.”

“You can’t change the past and now I can’t either. All I can do is get my things in order and wait for my end,” I told him with great sadness. “Coffee?”

Zack laid his hand on top of mine, sending another current through me. I blushed and poured us coffee. Guess a woman, even a dying woman, still feels attraction.

We walked back into the living room, sat down and talked for about two hours before they returned. I excused myself to my bedroom and went to my bed. Zack felt perfect to me, even more so than Brian. He made me laugh and he understood my bad jokes. We talked about so many things that somehow it helped me relax about my future.

Several times during the night, their arguments woke me up and I ended up watching from the doorway at the sparks flying, coffee being poured, and Amber yelling at Tom. Zack was Tom’s friend, not Amber’s and he came with them by mistake. Tom was actually the new assistant. Zack caught me looking at them and told them to shut up each time. They always apologized for waking me up and Amber could not bear to look at me.

When morning finally came, all three were sleeping on the floor. I walked over to the machine that Amber had built. It looked different from the prototype in the lab. Her ideas have gone a long way in twenty years. I scanned her notes and saw that all was sound. Amber finished the machine in less than twenty-four hours, which meant that they would leave after waking up.

I went into the kitchen and started on breakfast. I made pancakes, boiled eggs, and lots of coffee. Zack helped me carry the food into the living room after waking up and we conversed again about different things. He told me about the future. I laughed at the fashion he told me about, laughed at his summaries of the latest movies, and he was telling me about holo pads when Amber woke up and started yelling at him.

After Amber paused, Zack yelled back. “She knows that she wasn’t fired but was killed by you! It doesn’t matter if she knows about the future!”

Amber almost fainted.

I didn’t bother reminding her of her system, but Zack did.

Amber sat down on a chair and started crying. Tom looked around the scene and ate a pancake.

“Not bad,” Tom complimented my cooking.

“Thanks,” I muttered and then walked around to the machine. I turned it on.

Amber looked up and yelled, “don’t!”

I shook my head and opened the portal by Zack. He stumbled from shock right inside the portal. My heart hurt, but I couldn’t stand the fact that I have fallen in love with a man from the future and with whom I had no future. I couldn’t stand looking at my alive killer and her new assistant. I wanted to be alone and I was done being a nice host.

Tom pulled Amber to the portal. “You will destroy it, right?”

I nodded.

The started to walk in.

I whispered, “It was nice to know love before my end.”

The portal closed behind them and I destroyed the machine and all remains left behind.


Two months later

I walked towards Amber with coffee in hand as usual. She was eyeing the portal and the computer. Every time for the past week, I’ve been thinking about my day of death and if it would happen right then and there. Amber only a week ago, got to the point of where a portal would show up.

Amber pushed away the cup from my hands and I stumbled. Guess today is the day. I felt myself falling and then heard Amber cursing. I noticed that her button pressing wasn’t working and the portal wasn’t closing. A hand pulled me inside the portal then, and I heard Amber’s scream.

Seconds later, I was in a new office and staring into Zack’s brown eyes.

“But,” I stuttered, “why?”

“Everyone needs a future and I couldn’t bare to let you go,” Zack said.

I looked around to see Amber and Tom smiling. “To hell with the past. In the past you died, which means you can live in the future.”

I started to cry and felt Zack’s arms around me. “I’ll be there for you every step of the way for I fell in love with you in return.”


The End

Book Review: Ghosts from our Past

Book Title: Ghosts from our Past. Both Literally & Figuratively: The Study of the Paranormal ghostbusters

Book Author: Erin Gilbert and Abby L. Yates with Andrew Shaffer

Rating: 5 Dragon Paws 5-paws

It took for me three evenings to finish this entertaining and young novel. Since this is a new edition with somewhat updated material, the voices of the authors stayed young, fun, funny, and nice to read. On page 166, in the updated section, the authors tell us to burn the first edition if ever found. Actually, I wouldn’t burn it, but would explore it to find Fox Mulder and his partner Scully. To tell you the truth, though I have known about the TV show- X-Files for years, I did not watch it until 2015. When I started watching the show in 2015, I finished all of the episodes in two months and couldn’t wait for season 11 which I watched as well, though sadly was disappointed.

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Okay, back the review, but in my defense, the girls in “Ghosts from the past” got distracted a lot like when Erin raised her hand to say that she likes doing paperwork, section about flashlights, and when they were defending all women out there.

The book is divided into 4 parts and all of them were entertaining, especially the Elis Ley Line Map on page 91 which look confusing and more of an art pice than map, raccoons, their definitions, and the proton pack warnings. From my experience with my friends pack (that her husband made for her), the warnings are true. I do admit that she did pointed it at me but the time I was dressed up like a ghost (and looked good) and we were performing to the Ghostbusters theme song. Are you guys jealous yet? Her pack also made sounds!

Below is a photo of my friend’s collection. You can see the packs and the costumes. Also, since it wouldn’t be right to share the photos of the illustrations from inside the novel, here are a couple of photos that I can share. However, to learn more about the packs, read pages 136 to 137. There’s also a photo of her drinking at the movie theatre, but considering an important rule found on page 152, it is a bad idea to drink before a job so I will not share it with you, though technically she was off the clock from ghost hunting.

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Okay, again back to the review. What I really liked about the book is about all of those tips! Especially on the essential tools to have with you when ghostbusting. However, the girls forgot to add the note about food, but they do talk about it later. Also, I think their college professor would be okay with them telling the world that he was into ghosts because he passed away before their wrote the first edition and everybody knows that talking ill of the dead is not a good idea.

I love books with accommodating images and guides and this book has plenty. Considering the fact that first edition had a lot more, I wish I could have seen those illustrations. The girls after all did take classes on art… If I remember correctly.

I highly recommend this novel to someone who likes having a good laugh. It’s definitely a mood raiser. I would say a minimum age requirement of 18 and up because only eighteen years old and older could relate to having Chinese take out, spending time in libraries and coffee shops, and of course having friends who back each other’s back. Erin and Abby sound like a best friend pair that would stay best friends and I think that though many years separated them, they can still do some Ghostbusting together.

I received this book from Blogging for Books for this review.

Book Review: The Silver Butterfly

Book Title: The Silver Butterfly Snip20160803_4

Book Author: Uma Mawaery

Source: Received a free copy for an honest review

Rating: 5 Dragon Paws 5 paws

It is an absolutely beautiful telling of a fated romance.

At first I didn’t know what I got myself into because I don’t like reading about moping teenagers. Soon, though, I hated it even more because it was now a moping twenty something young woman. I really groaned when I read how many days Amber had been depressed over her last and only relationship with a guy who was a complete jerk. However, as Radley appeared more and more in the picture, I started to like the novel.

It was nice to see Amber finding herself again, being so open with Radley, and learning about the supernatural… especially about the butterfly. Actually there were two butterflies… there was a blue one, too. Though, at times the story line felt a little dragged out, the ending chapters made up for it.

It is truly an inspired work and I can tell how Uma’s mother became a drill sergeant so she would finish it and shared it with others.

Some of the ideas and or emotions are not suited for an audience younger than 17 I would say. Mainly due to the emotions being presented.

I recommend this novel to girls of 17 and older who love romantic storylines mixed in with the supernatural. Ladies, there are no vampires or werewolves in this novel, thank god. I’m not sure if boys or men would like it because it may be cheesy, but who am I to judge?

Oh and I love the hook line for this novel: I will wait a hundred years for you. Also, the cover is really beautiful and was one of the main reasons why I wanted to read it. I never really did read the synopsis…

Happy reading.

Release Day of Seven Hours

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I’m happy to share with you that the paperback edition of Seven Hours: Challenge Accepted is available on Amazon. Currently, the Kindle version is being published by KDP Select and it’s going to take about 72 hours for the amazon page to be updated.

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Link for US Amazon: Seven Hours on Amazon

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How to prepare to write Chapter Summaries

When I did research about book agents, I also did research on book proposals and what the agents look for.

Most agents look for:

  • Your quary letter
  • Table of Contents
  • The Overview of your book proposal
  • Competing books in your genre (especially current ones. Do people read your topic?)
  • Information about your title (show that you did research)
  • About the author (that would be you)
  • Chapter summaries
  • Sample Chapter
  • Any art (my additional point since I love adding drawings to my novels)

The focus of this blog post is chapter summaries.

One may forget to write one paragraph summary for each chapter because one may focus too much on characters, plot, flow, and English (or whatever language you write in). It is easy to forget about chapter summaries. However, if you have not done chapter summaries for your novels yet, start doing them now.

It’s important to have chapter summaries for several reasons:

  • Characters:
    • Easy to track who appears in each chapter and if you’re missing a key character
  • Sections
    • Allows you to create sections in your novels, say you have ten chapter summaries and in those chapters everything happens on Earth and then chapter 11 shows your character on Mars. This may be a good time to create a title section page so the reader would understand something is different.
  • Time frame
    • Does day one pass in your chapter or day one moves on to chapter 2.
    • Helps you create your own timeline that you can keep as a separate document for reference
    • Do several days pass in one chapter?
      • Does that make your chapter too long?
      • Are you missing key variables?
      • Do you have too many sections that don’t feel finished?
      • Too many cliffhangers?
  • Cliffhangers
    • Does each chapter end on cliffhanger?
    • Do you need those cliffhangers?
    • Maybe you need a different ending?
  • Flow
    • Does it make sense what your character is doing or saying?
    • Does it make sense to have an event that happens in chapter 7 when it should have been in chapter 4?
      • If the answer is yes, don’t freak out. It’s a good thing. You came up with a good event and by timeline it would make more sense to have it earlier on. That’s okay. Sure, you will need to rewrite a lot, but your readers will thank you for the flow.
  • Lead into next book of your series
    • Helps you keep track of what already happened and keep track of your characters
    • Does the final ending makes sense?

Now an example from my unpublished novel (I am not going to share all my chapters,  but here’s a glimpse into my mafia world)

Table of Contents and notes about major events

Chapter 1: Halo and Horns

  • August 21 Monday
  • First day of classes
  • Meet roommate, Laura, friend, Jack
  • Learns about Mafia

Chapter 2: Bumping into Reality

  • August 22 Tuesday 
  • Reading the newspaper: Swingers: Inside the Secret World of President Jones and his ‘Couples.’
  • Bumping into Rayne, TJ, and Jem

Chapter Summaries

Chapter 1: Halo and Horns

Whatever the reason behind being at M’Heart University for Angel Svobodina proves to be, the quiet life of a freshman, disappeared upon seeing a campus fight, along with her new friend, Jack. This is made clear by the cutting remark by university girls after the fight ended that concludes the opening part of the chapter and Angel’s motivation to research Rayne Tarotia, the son of a local Don. In this way, the main theme — that is, the discrepancy between accepted normality and reality hints, that somehow those two themes will collide bringing out the real reason behind being at M’Heart.

Chapter 2: Bumping into Reality

Chapter two, takes off with Angel’s second day at being a forensic science student at M’Heart University. However, since she only knows her roommate Laura, and her friend Jack, she can’t really ask anyone about the buzz that seems to be around her. She’s forced to buy a newspaper where she reads the title of the news— Swingers: Inside the Secret World of President Jones and his ‘Couples.’ Feeling sick, she throws away the newspaper and continues on her way to get food, however, she doesn’t reach her destination for she bumps into none other than, Rayne Tarotia and his two friends, TJ and Jem. Feeling apologetic, she buys them pizza and ends up being invited to play pool with them the next night. The collision of the themes starts right then and there.


Now, let’s analyze my example.

In the Table of Contents and notes about major events section one learns the title of the chapter, the date, specific event, meeting characters, and some key information. This information helps to organize your summaries. 

In the Chapter Summaries section, one learns what happens one those dates with the information about the theme. Having themes for stories is important and noting a theme in your summary is important. 


I hope that this post helped you to think about book summaries and how helpful they can be to your writing.

Please comment to let me know what you guys thought about this post.

 

 

 

Book Review: Land of Stories (The Enchantress Returns)

Book Title: The Land of Stories (The Enchantress Returns) 2

Book Author: Chris Colfer

Source: Bought at Barnes and Noble

Rating: 5 Dragon Paws 5 paws

As promised, I went back to the store and bought book 2, 3, and 4. I am going to wait for book 5 (even though it is out) because I want a paperback copy, not a hard cover.

For my review of book 1, go here: The Land of Stories (The Wishing Spell)

This book happens a year after the twins return back to their regular routine, though both are sad about it. They don’t like not seeing grandma, doing homework, and are sad that they may have lost their connection to the land of stories. That, of course, changes when their mother gets kidnapped. If you haven’t read this novel, stop reading this review right now because it may have spoilers.

This novel was less predictable, maybe because I was liking the twins and wasn’t looking for predictability. The cover made me wonder about Froggy because I thought he returned back to a man, and bam, he was a frog again due to the seriousness of evil. It was also nice to see their mother move on and I do say, Bob, certainly was a good man… especially since he escaped to the Land of Stories to find the love of his life and her children. I guess, the most shocking thing that happened was the separation of the twins at the end and the portal closing, though it was needed. Considering that there are more books after book 2, the twins will be reunited and I am curious to see how Chris brought them back together.

What I also like about this series is that the twins grow up, they don’t stay the same age so we get to follow their adventures. It’s good for kids to grow up with characters who grow up with them. I also liked the changes in Conner. Chris made him grow up a little and not just in his height. It was nice to see his writing being phrased and that though Alex gets the magic, he gets the storytelling gift. It was perfect.

Stay tuned for my reviews for the rest of the books in the series.

OH! I almost forgot. We got a glimpse into the tree that the twins’ father told them about. That was nice.

Recommend to middle grade kids and adults who love fairy tales.

Readers’ Favorite Book Review: Seven Hours

Good Morning!

So, I woke up at 6:00 am and checked my phone because well I still had 40 minutes to sleep. I never made it back to dreamland because I had received a text message from Readers’ Favorite that one of their reviewers have completed their review of my novella.

Would you go back to bed after seeing a text message like that?

So, of course, I logged into my account and scrolled down to the review. My novella was reviewed by Viga Boland for Readers’ Favorite with a rating of 4.

Now, I really don’t care that much about ratings. It’s more about the review itself. Did the reviewer really read my story? Were they able to connect with my main heroine? Was their review helpful? Did it make me happy?  Does it make me cry and want to continue polishing the story line and by that… not releasing the novella on the promised date?

Well, I loved Viga’s review. And, I loved the additional comment (which I already added to the praise page inside the novella). I’m really happy that she saw past the love story ^_^

Where am I going with this?

I want to share the review with you and the comment. Let me guys know what you think and if the review makes you want to read it more.

See below:  

Review:

What would it be like to be born blind and, after 19 years, begin to see? This is a theme Angelina Kerner explores in her novella, Seven Hours. A light, enjoyable read, primarily aimed at teens or young adults, Angelina Kerner builds her story around 19-year-old Chanel. Chanel has lived very well with her disability over the years, has a couple of good friends to assist her when necessary, and gets out and about relatively easily. Nonetheless, her newsworthy parents decide she needs a bodyguard, and hire Leon to protect her against paparazzi onslaughts. Chanel is angered by what she sees as an affront to her independence. She deems it unnecessary babying. But despite herself, and for more reasons than the protection he provides, Chanel comes to love Leon.

While the romantic angle of Seven Hours will appeal to young readers, one would hope they will also be caught up in Kerner’s exploration of what it feels like for a blind person beginning to see people and the world around her/him for the first time. Eyesight is something the sighted take for granted, but through this little story we are forced to look at the world through the eyes of a blind person. What a different world one experiences when all is black. At one point, Chanel asks Leon to describe his eyes. How do you describe eyes to someone who can’t even see shapes or colour? When Chanel’s girlfriend, Bridgette, says her nail polish is orange, what is the colour “orange”? These considerations Kerner presents in Seven Hours give young readers more to think about than just another story about falling in love. An enjoyable exploration of a worthwhile theme. Well done, Angelina Kerner.

Comment:

Congratulations Angelina on breathing life into a theme (blindness) rarely explored in chick lit or young adult fiction. That impressed me and kept me reading, more so than the romantic story line. But you brought it all together nicely to a satisfying finish.

Movie Review: Cool Kids Don’t Cry (2012)

Title: Cool Kids Don’t Cry cool kids  Photo taken from IMBD

Director: Dennis Bots

  • Writers: Karin van Holst Pellekaan, Jacques Vriens (novel)
  • Genre: Drama, Family
  • Language: Dutch, has English subtitles

Source: Amazon Prime Video

Rating: 5 Dragon Paws 5-paws

IMBD Summary: 

“Adaptation of one of Benelux most famous children’s novels. Tough prime school girl Akkie loves soccer and can be a real bully. Love is the only thing she’s scared of. When Akkie is diagnosed with Leukemia, she has to fight for her life. On the verge of going to high school, Akkie has to allow love to enter her life, and thus gain courage to accept the inevitable.” Written by Reinier Selen http://www.imdb.com/title/tt1800372/?ref_=ttpl_pl_tt

Review:

Today, I wanted to review something different and this movie popped into my head. On Saturday night, I was searching for a movie to watch on Amazon Prime Video and decided to watch it. I didn’t expect not to understand the movie and was thankful for subtitles. Usually I watch Anime or Asian Drama’s with subtitles so it was interesting to listen to Dutch and find words that I understood.

This movie is not a happy one and therefore, if you are looking to watch a movie where there is a happy ending, this movie is not for you. It is an emotional roller coaster. I am very happy to say that I believe the main actress did a terrific job and her job was no easy task. This movie made me cry, mainly because cinematography did do a good job… kidding… well partly… the story-line made me cry.

I’m not so sure that it was too much about love though it was there. It was mainly about one girl’s life and acceptance of the inevitable. Oh, and Dr. Mustache did a good job explaining to her about Leukemia. Sure, the movie was obvious at times, but it didn’t matter because it was about Akki’s journey.

If you’re looking for something emotional to watch or to view an inspiration journey of a young girl through truly tough times, then watch it. Just have tissues next to you.